My Redwall Poem - "Of Redwall Abbey"

[Bagira_GoldenPlume]

Deep in Mossflower Woods so green; Redwall Abbey stands, a monuement to behold, founded a warrior bold and an Abbess of a pure heart.

Many a traveller come a-wandering by, niether bird no beas, just for a pleasure visit,with feasting,story-telling and merry-making; or a safe haven from evil conquerors bent on demination.

Yes, where legends form,and where heroes are born, Redwall Abbey is truly a monuement to behold; if thou would to travel through Mossflower Woods, you'll be sure to visit Redwall Abbey; In summer,when their roses are in full bloom.

[Lord Thunderpaw]

Deep in Mossflower Woods so green; Redwall Abbey stands, a monuement to behold, founded a warrior bold and an Abbess of a pure heart.

Many a traveller come a-wandering by, niether bird no beas, just for a pleasure visit,with feasting,story-telling and merry-making; or a safe haven from evil conquerors bent on demination.

Yes, where legends form,and where heroes are born, Redwall Abbey is truly a monuement to behold; if thou would to travel through Mossflower Woods, you'll be sure to visit Redwall Abbey; In summer,when their roses are in full bloom.

My opinion on the subject of your poem is it was pretty good, just work on your spelling a little bit more and the rhythm of it seemed to me a bit off. Anyways, keep making more poems.

[Bagira_GoldenPlume]

My opinion on the subject of your poem is it was pretty good, just work on your spelling a little bit more and the rhythm of it seemed to me a bit off. Anyways, keep making more poems.

I don't see any spelling mistakes, and what about the rythmn? 'am a bit rusty at poetry skills

[Lord Thunderpaw]

I don't see any spelling mistakes

Your poem's errors are:

1. "Monuement" spelled correctly is "monument". It is spelled incorrectly twice.

2. "Niether spelled correctly is "neither".

3. "Beas" spelled correctly is "bees".

4. There should be a space after the following sentence fragment's two commas:

"just for a pleasure visit,with feasting,story-telling".

5. "Story-telling spelled correctly is "storytelling".

6. "Traveller" should be spelled "traveler" (I know, I get confused sometimes, too ).

7. The following sentence fragment's semi-colon should be changed to a comma:

"and merry-making; or a safe haven"

8. "Merry-making" spelled correctly is "merrymaking".

9. "Demination" is not a word.

10. There should be a space after the following sentence fragment's comma:

"Yes, where legends form,and where heroes are born"

11. The following sentence fragment's word, to is unnecessary:

"if thou would to travel through Mossflower Woods"

12. The following sentence fragment's word, "you'll" is unnecessary:

"if thou would to travel through Mossflower Woods, you'll be sure to visit Redwall Abbey"

13. The following sentence fragment's word, "In" should not be capitalized:

"In summer,when their roses are in full bloom."

14. The following sentence fragment's semi-colon is unnecessary:

"you'll be sure to visit Redwall Abbey; In summer,when their roses are in full bloom."

Sorry I if seem to overly criticize you, it is just that I want you to write great poems!

what about the rythmn? 'am a bit rusty at poetry skills

I can't really explain the rythm. Maybe you should just leave it. I don't know.