Comments for "Ojoll"

[Lord Thunderpaw]

Comments for my continuing fan fic, "Ojoll".

[Lady Constance]

It's great! You've really got some potential! The one thing I noticed was that there wasn't any indentions or real paragraphs. But that's okay. I didn't even know indentions existed until I went to a writing class. And I only use them when I'm writing.

I can't say how I overall enjoyed it, 'cause I haven't read enough. As far as it's been going I like it. Especially the part with the Dibbuns promising to not go down and rob the kitchen!!

[Lord Thunderpaw]

It's great! You've really got some potential! The one thing I noticed was that there wasn't any indentions or real paragraphs. But that's okay. I didn't even know indentions existed until I went to a writing class.

I indented and made paragraphs on Microsoft Word but when I copied and pasted it here it went away, I guess.

[Lady Constance]

I indented and made paragraphs on Microsoft Word but when I copied and pasted it here it went away, I guess.

I was wondering if it did that. Oh well, it's still good without the indentions. The one other thing I forgot to mention before was the chapters should be just a bit longer.

When will the next installment be?

[Lord Thunderpaw]

When will the next installment be?

I changed a lot of stuff so I don't know. You were the only person here who took interest in "Ojoll" so that's a reason I started a new-ish story.